Body and Soul
The most influential moment in my life wasn't what I expected it to be, or planned it to be. Some peoples lives are changed forever, growing in maturity and developing admirable aspirations, when they begin a new life with the person they love through marriage, or perhaps when they are anticipating the arrival of a new baby, or when they have reached their educational/career goals, or even when, like me, something unexpected comes and changes your perspective on life and your own purpose. (Notes: Crappy beginning! Touch up the structure and expand on ideas to develop a better opening!)
When I was sixteen years old, having just moved back to the states from a two year hiatus in Puerto Rico, I didn't much care for school. I knew I wasn't the first teenager to feel that way either, so I felt confident in the fact that I could slack off and no one would really notice or care. After being back in the states for a few months I learned about the Washington State Running Start Program for juniors and seniors in high school. I was ecstatic! Anything to get me out of learning the mundane subjects that had been haunting me and every other teenager for what seemed an eternity in high school. I could finally choose something that interested me and leave the rest of the educational garbage in my wake, or so I thought. (Notes: Leave out unnecessary items and follow a tighter story line for better flow from paragraph to paragraph. Perhaps hint at the purpose? Perhaps not... Hmmm... I like the "surprise" aspect. Kind of like Rose's writing. A lot a details in the beginning and pull it all together in the end.)
Good--lots of interesting ideas here too!
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